The below story is the final which is written within the book. I'm so happy with how it turned out, I used rhymes to allow the story to flow better, which really helped when it came to continuing the story from one page to another. As well as this, I designed the sentences to roll of the tongue as best as I could, while still keeping the story intact. This was difficult, for some instances such as when mentioning Fiona and Philip, I used the pair instead because It was a better and more concise way of mentioning them. It also kept the sentence length significantly shorter, which helps a lot because the page real estate being rather small in comparison to font size.
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(1) Flynn likes to look out of his window every night,
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(1) Flynn likes to look out of his window every night,
Staring up at the stars so bright.
(2) Flynn has a brother and a sister: Fiona and
Philip.
One day their Uncle buys a telescope for
them all to share.
(3) The dastardly pair, Fiona and Philip
Did not want to share the telescope with
Flynn.
Giggling to themselves, they locked it away
from him.
(4) A new star is out tonight.
Fiona and Phillip do not see it, despite
the bright light.
(5) Flynn sneaks out to find the pair with the
telescope,
Astounded by the sight of the star, he shouts
with delight.
“Look!”
(6) A journalist arrives to see the star
through her own eyes,
And Archie the dog scampers to meet her.
Wanting to say the star is theirs,
Fiona and Philip shut Flynn under the
stairs.
(7) Together they bicker and fight, each of
them claiming to be right.
(8) As the pair continue argue about whose star
it is,
Flynn escapes and rushes out to meet the journalist.
(9) He takes her outside for her to see,
The star isn’t just for you and me.
(10) It is for everyone to share,
Not just for the greedy pair.
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